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Some psychologists recommend that to overcome stresses in daily life we should do nothing at all for a period of time of the day.To what extent do you agree or disagree

#psychologists #stresses #life #period #time
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In a highly competitive world, hectic lifestyle and high work load increased the level of
stress
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 among masses.
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Therefore some
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Therefore, some
 persons reckon that "
stress
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 is a gullible term".Due to
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 reason
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few psychologists recommend that to overcome stresses in daily
life
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 we must not do anything at all for a particular
time
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 period of the day.Personally
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I opine that there are several other methods to alleviate
stress
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 in our daily
life
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aquiesce
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 with the given statement to some extent.I shall justify my visions with
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relevant examples
a relevant example
 in the forthcoming subsections. To commence with
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stress
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 has become a common part of our lives.There are manifold benefits of sitting idle.People can divert their
mind
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 towards the good old memories when they sit idle.It releases good hormones in our
mind
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.They can converse with their family members in their leisure
time
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.
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Stress level
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The stress level
 increases when person busy towards their and they have no
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 to relax their
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 and body.Give
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some time
 free for themselves is
good method
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a good method
 to feel
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refreshed
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, according to a survey it has been found that around 60percent inhabitants sit idle and feel energised because it act as a
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 buster.
In contrast
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there are myriad other ways to mitigate
stress
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 in human
beings
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being's
life
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 and foremost is that masses can do some leisure activities in their spare
time
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 like outdoor and indoor activities.
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we can release
stress
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 by doing meditation.When we do meditation
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,
our
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 is
in
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at
 peace and we can remove adverse thoughts from our
mind
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, individuals can indulge in some activity which could be a hobby or passion.During activities like playing games our minds get diverted and
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 can release our
stress
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 and positive thoughts come to our
mind
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.
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, according to a recent study it has been found that persons play outdoor sports when they get back abode and feel much relaxed. To recapitulate, persons should not sit alone for a long period of
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 because it may generate some detrimental thoughts in their
mind
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.
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they should try to keep themselves busy in performing leisure activities in their spare
time
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 because it aids to reduce
stress
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 in our daily
life
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.

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