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People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons r your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, more and more people think that it is hard-hearted to increase a
nimals
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animal
animal's
intake in d
iet.
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the diet
 I strongly disagree as animals are an important p
roteins
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protein
source
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And emotions should not influence our diet choices
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 To start with, meats
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eggs and diary products
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which represent the main food from animals, contain a large amount of different amino a
cides
any of various water-soluble compounds having a sour taste and capable of turning litmus red and reacting with a base to form a salt
acids
that are essential to humans’ h
eath.
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
For example
, red meats have a
rginine which
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arginine, which
is considered as i
mportant factor
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an important factor
important factors
to help in building humans’ DNA.
Secondly
, allowing e
motions
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the emotions
to take part of our diet is not a well-planned decision since it can lead to effect many of people’s choices in life
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For one thing
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it can change our clothing habits.
In addition
, many of other manufactured products depend - to some extent - on a
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animal
products
such
 as mobile phones. And
thus
 people need p
rioritize
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to prioritize
their benefit. Relying on animals and its product in feeding is not cruel
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People need it for their own health, and they depend on it for a more convenient life
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Accept space
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And it is better for humans to opt not to involve emotions in their life choices.

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