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some people say that olympic games are not relevant in the 21st century. do you agree or disagree

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It is generally claimed that the Olympic games are irrelevant to be conducted in the current century because it required huge expenses and time.
However
, I
can not
can not
cannot
 entirely agree with the statement because games bring employment opportunities and provide more sports facilities to the public. As the population is increasing day by day around the world and many countries have an
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 economic situation.
In other words
, more people don not have jobs; in
such
 circumstances, organizing the Olympic will bring many working opportunities for locals.
For example
, for athletes, their families, and audiences
,
Accept space
,
 the government has to provide basic necessity like food and accomodation, for that purpose need work- force, thereby leads to economic growth.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
by organizing
such
 global games, the host nation will have a chance to construct more sports facilities like football grounds, gymnastic arenas, and swimming pools. These facilities can be used by the local public after the games to enhance their quality of health.
Moreover
, many young people will motivate and can get an opportunity to be world-class players in the future. A good illustration is, after
Beijing olympics
Suggestion
the Beijing Olympics
Beijing Olympics
, many youngsters exhibit their interest in ice-related sports because sports organizer has constructed ice rings.
However
, snowing in China is relatively rare. In conclusion, I believe the organizing Olympics have more positives than a drawback because it helps to raise the country's economy and the
public's
Suggestion
public
 health benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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