some people say that olympic games are not relevant in the 21st century. do you agree or disagree

It is generally claimed that the Olympic games are irrelevant to be conducted in the current century because it required huge expenses and time.
However
, I
can not
can not
cannot
entirely agree with the statement because games bring employment opportunities and provide more sports facilities to the public. As the population is increasing day by day around the world and many countries have an
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
economic situation.
In other words
, more people don not have jobs; in
such
circumstances, organizing the Olympic will bring many working opportunities for locals.
For example
, for athletes, their families, and audiences
,
Accept space
,
the government has to provide basic necessity like food and accomodation, for that purpose need work- force, thereby leads to economic growth.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
by organizing
such
global games, the host nation will have a chance to construct more sports facilities like football grounds, gymnastic arenas, and swimming pools. These facilities can be used by the local public after the games to enhance their quality of health.
Moreover
, many young people will motivate and can get an opportunity to be world-class players in the future. A good illustration is, after
Beijing olympics
Suggestion
the Beijing Olympics
Beijing Olympics
, many youngsters exhibit their interest in ice-related sports because sports organizer has constructed ice rings.
However
, snowing in China is relatively rare. In conclusion, I believe the organizing Olympics have more positives than a drawback because it helps to raise the country's economy and the
public's
Suggestion
public
health benefits.
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