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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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Many people contemplate their salary as the most salient feature of their
work
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 while others believe that their contributions to society through their jobs hold more importance than the money they earn. In my opinion, a
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 should have ethical demands and needs to be passion-oriented.
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, it would be futile to
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 merely for wages. Let us
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 examine why passion is a prominent part of people's
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 life. No doubt, passion acts as the fuel that drives people to withstand the caustic side of their
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. If people chose a
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 nowhere connected to their affection and dedication, they will fall into a victim of depression and perform poorly in their jobs.
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, if we torch upon successful persons’ stories, we would find that almost all of them have been in the career that they were passionate about. Suppose Bill Gates or Steve Jobs, both of them were tech enthusiasts, and
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 took technology as the means of their career.
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, a
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 needs to be ethically demanding where people need to find aspects of doing something for humanity and society. Working for the people not only will provide mental satisfaction, but
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 will strengthen the purpose of their
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 in life. Take Mother Theresa or Nelson Mandala for an example. Both of them are highly admired for their works for humanity and they did their best because they knew they were doing something for others and to make the world a better place. To conclude, salary is somewhat important for people to support their expenses, but if they do not feel attached to their
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, they will feel exhausted in their life. They will
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 be suppressed by the undue pressure that could have been avoided if they had the passion and ethical context in their
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.
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