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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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In recent years, the increase in population together with the lack of space, has been driving the governments to build more and more Dwellings outside the cities. I believe that the two opposite ideas of limiting the construction in the countryside and allowing for building homes can be defended. On the one hand, protecting the countryside from excessive building carries a number of benefits. All the benefits can be argued from an environmental perspective. Preventing the cutting of trees will increase the quality of the air since
green plants act
Suggestion
the green plants act
 as the lungs of the Earth. The cleaner the air, the less would be the risk of human illnesses.
Furthermore
, if there are fewer houses in a region, there could be less noise pollution
consequently
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consequences
. The reduction in pollution, air or noise-originated, is the main factor leading the workers towards higher job efficiency.
On the other hand
, the option of building houses outside cities may be
supported reasonably
Suggestion
reasonably supported
.
Firstly
, construction in less known locations will benefit people in terms of costs. By saving money from rent and bills, families are able to escalate their life quality. Improve nutrition and health are aspects of one's life the extra money could be spent on.
Secondly
, when fewer people are living and communicating in city
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
, faster transportation might be achieved, and
as a result
, a society's economy can grow to a greater extent. The lower expenses of governments are caring based on less pollution in
downtowns
Suggestion
downtown
 might add up to a country's economic growth as well. In conclusion, the question of whether or not to build in rural areas seems not to have a simple answer, and many other factors are to impact.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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