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Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Education
 is the primary requirement that
need
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needs
 to be provided
of
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by
for
to
 children. Every parent will try to give the best possible
education
 to their children. Some people believe that it would be better to send their children to government-financed
schools while
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schools, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 are more inclined towards private
school
education
. Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools are not required to pay taxes and I totally agree with
this
. Parents who send their send their children to private schools need to pay their tuition fee, bus charges and a lot more of other expenses which are not required in any of the government-financed
school
 as all these are maintained by government itself. Apart from paying a huge amount of money for their children in private schools, families will be burdened to pay
taxes which
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taxes, which
 support universal
education
 that they are not availing at all. They are not sending their children to any of the government-financed schools and so are not required to pay any
such
 taxes. I went to a government-financed
school but
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school, but
 I had a friend named Rohitha, who used to study in a private
school
. Her father left them at
a
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an
 early age and her mother have to manage all the work and yet she opted to make her daughter study in a private
school
 for better
education
. Apart from the expenses that took a toll on her mother, she was still
had
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having
 to pay the educational
taxes which
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taxes, which
does
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do
 no good in
anyway
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any way
 to her or her family as they are not using them at all. In conclusion, I agree to the fact that the families who send their children to a non-government-financed schools are not required to pay any of the taxes for educational purposes as they themselves are not using them.
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