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Developments in science and technology have caused environmental problems. Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment, while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The environmental problems have become more and some
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 we cannot go back to the simple life again while the high-tech society can figure out some solutions for it.
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 think it is impossible to reduce the use of modern technologies as a way of living simpler
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 as using bicycles as the major way to transport, regarding to the heavy traffic systems and busy work-life nowadays.
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in my
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opinion, it
 is an efficient way to use scientific methods to improve our environment in the industrial word.We have plenty of great scientists and facilities already and we should take good advantage of
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we cannot give up the products of the industrial word
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we love air-conditioner to cool down the air in summer and make us warm in winter.Another case is that we are used to drive private cars which bring us massive convenience that we can resist the benefit of it
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while we clearly notice the drawback of the air-pollution caused by it.
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only scientific ways can solve the tough environmental problems efficiently.
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scientists designed the environmentally friendly bottles and tissues we used
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every day
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which can decrease the bad effect of
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 materials used before.The substitute fuels of gas
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were invented
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there are more and more cars chose electric cars. In conclusion
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we should spend more effort on scientific methods of environment protecting
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 of forcing ourselves to live a life which seemed
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simpler, but
 actually is out of date and is hard to be put in practice.

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