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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Art is the expression of ideas and imaginations which require a certain degree of
freedom
 for artists to flourish their creativity. While other people think that artists ought to have complete
freedom
 to express any thoughts and ideas. I would agree with the former argument that a certain amount of independence is necessary for expressing one’s ideas.
To begin
 with, as the literal definition of art states that it is the expression of ideas and imagination, artists do require some autonomy when it comes to choosing the medium to exert their artistic capability.
This
allow
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allows
 artists not only to convey their ideas conveniently and
comfortably but
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comfortably, but
also
 take their creative skills to the
next
 level. But it is commonly observed that in some conservative societies due to religious, political or cultural norms, certain art mediums
such
 as dance, music, painting, and sculpture are discouraged.
This
 not only deprives the creativity of artists and but
also
 left them depressed and frustrated.
However
, it is
also
 seen in some liberal societies where artists are granted unlimited
freedom
 to express their thoughts on any topic of their choice, often ends up in chaos and unrest in the community. Some artists under the cover of
freedom
 of expression often cross their limits and disrespect other people’s beliefs and ideologies.
For instance
, a couple of years ago, blasphemous cartoons published in Denmark and Norway hurt
emotions
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the emotions
 of Muslims and caused aggression and hatred around the world. In conclusion, while other people’s opinions may vary, in my opinion,
artist
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the artist
an artist
 should have sufficient
freedom
 to express their ideas through their medium of choice and respect other people’s beliefs and ideologies when exerting their thoughts.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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