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In many cities, many people are living in large apartment blocks. Does this this accommodation has more advantages than disadvantages.

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In many cities, people prefer to live in small flats while others feel more comfortable with spacious accomodation blocks. In my opinion, the disadvantages of large apartments outweigh their advantages. On the one hand, some families choose to start their life in big flats, as
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 will ensure more comfy lifestyle to them, especially large family, in which each member gets the opportunity to have his or her own private room.
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 kind of housing styles, usually established in a vast lot area and that will decrease population concentration.
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, less troubles among families,
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, these complexes commonly have an elegant architectural design that adds more beauty to the city outlook.
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, there are some drawbacks of
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 manner of living.
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, the city will need to allocate large areas specified for population resettlement and
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 will be at the cost of removing many green zones in the region.
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 the districts need to be placed far away from the city centre which will create another problem regarding transportation difficulties.
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 kind of apartments are usually expensive and not everyone is able to afford the price. Added to that, they need good services with some hardship in keeping them clean all the time.
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 but not the least, big flats electricity expenditure is higher than small one,
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, keeping them warm during winter or cold during summer is another challenge. In conclusion,
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 large accomodation seems luxurious and attractive to many, there are disappointing facts need to be considered carefully.
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