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In many rich countries the number of children are not pursuing science subject What are the possible reasons and also give some possible stops to go tackle this problem

#countries #children #science
Taking
science
 subjects are very important because they play a vital role in t
raining
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the training
of future s
cientist
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scientific
and specialist
.
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 If somehow the country fails to prepare and train scientist and specialist for its future generation when the time comes they will not have the necessary e
xperts.
skillfulness by virtue of possessing special knowledge
expertise
 They will have to relay on the in for information of technology and s
cientist
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science
scientifically
which will come t
o
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with
a great price
.N
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.
ow a days we see
this
 problem in
Third
 World countries
such
 as African nations who have to rely on foreign companies due to their lack of expert workers
.
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.
 There are a wide variety of jobs in here early every country so it cannot s
aid
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say
that if someone does not take a
science
subject
 they will encounter many problems in f
uture
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the future
to find a
job
. Most likely they will be able to put a
job
 in other s
ubjects but
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subjects, but
finding a
job
 is not the only benefit that taking a
science
subject
 has its it give the student a general understanding of how things work in our world and the ability to corporate better with other fields. I think schools should arrange sized words for the students they should see the work and research that are happening in the universities and research c
entres many
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centres, many
students visit our university and after they talk to us and see the work that we are doing, they got encouraged and motivated in pursuing a
science
subject
. Or personally when I was a child TV p
rograms
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program
with the size
subject
 really motivated me to pursue a
science
 degree. To conclude, I think
this
 problem will cause economical issues for government in the long Run but is not reason for not finding a
job
 and Guam it should be attention to motivating the students through different means.

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