The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart visualizes the total percentage of income collected at the fundraising event in the King Primary school. The

activities

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involved from first to sixth

grade

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in order are dance

competition

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competitions

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, cake decorating

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contest

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contests

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, book

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sale

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sales

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, art

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sale

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sales

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, cookie

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sale

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sales

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and soccer skill

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contest

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contests

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Chart

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shows the dance and cake decoration

contest

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has raised most of the fundraising event,

where

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the art and book

sale

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activity for the

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and

fourth-

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fourth grade

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raised very low compared to the other

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. The cookie

sale

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and soccer skill content

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earned a decent amount of portion in total. The dance competitions

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made the most significant portion

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with other of 23.7% in total. It is followed by the cake decoration

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for the

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grade

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with 20.9%, which stands in

the

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second

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place. The book

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has earned the least amount

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just 7.8% in total

bellow

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below

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the art

sale

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for the

third

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grade

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, of which 13.9%. Among

the

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all the

activities

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from the first to sixth

grade

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the

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sale

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sales

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activities

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has able to make nearly 40% in total,

where

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the contests,

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, made significantly better. In the

sale

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activity, the fifth

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has

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collected most of 18.3%.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

199 words

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The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In numerous nations, there is a growing trend for individuals to frequently discuss financial matters, such as their earnings or expenditures, in everyday conversation. What are the reasons behind this phenomenon? Is it advantageous or detrimental?

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Literature helps to develop a child's morals and feeling of humanity. As a result, from infancy until maturity, children should be given the chance to connect with literary works. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that Olympic games are exciting event that brings other nations together. Others say Olympics expensive waste of money that would be better spent on other things. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.