The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart visualizes the total percentage of income collected at the fundraising event in the King Primary school. The
activities
involved from first to sixth grade
in order are dance competition
, cake decorating Fix the agreement mistake
competitions
contest
, book Fix the agreement mistake
contests
sale
, art Fix the agreement mistake
sales
sale
, cookie Fix the agreement mistake
sales
sale
and soccer skill Fix the agreement mistake
sales
contest
.
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contests
Chart
shows the dance and cake decoration Add an article
The chart
contest
has raised most of the fundraising event, where
the art and book Correct word choice
whereas
sale
activity for the third
and fourth-
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fourth grade
grade
raised very low compared to the other activities
. The cookie sale
and soccer skill content has
earned a decent amount of portion in total.
The dance competitions Correct subject-verb agreement
have
has
made the most significant portion Change the verb form
have
comparing
with other of 23.7% in total. It is followed by the cake decoration Wrong verb form
compared
contest
for the second
grade
with 20.9%, which stands in the
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apply
second
place. The book sale
has earned the least amount of
just 7.8% in total Change preposition
apply
bellow
the art Correct your spelling
below
sale
for the third
grade
, of which 13.9%.
Among the
all the Correct article usage
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activities
from the first to sixth grade
the sale
Fix the agreement mistake
sales
activities
has able to make nearly 40% in total, where
the contests, Correct word choice
whereas
on the other hand
, made significantly better. In the sale
activity, the fifth grade
has
collected most of 18.3%.Unnecessary verb
apply
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