Some people think parents should control the behaviour of children from a very young age but others think we should give them more freedom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The approach of upbringing children is largely-

dependent

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depends

depending

depend

on their parents' mentality. While some people

are arguing

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argue

with giving too much freedom to their

childs

a young person of either sex

children

child

shields

,

i

refers to the speaker or writer

I

tend to agree with others who are against of overcontrolling of young people.

To begin

with the idea of managing

children

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children's

child's

child

behaviour, it is extremely common for many families to have a great

affect

a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon

effect

on their children's choices.

This

impact relates not only with serious decisions to be made up

,

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,

but parents

also

frequently are pressing their children to act in a favour of them

,

Accept space

,

even in trivial situations.

For example

, if a teenager wants to go out with a partner

,

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,

whom she or he prefer to be with, his or her mother or father will not give a permission

untill

up to, before the time

until

they feel that the partner is suitable for their children. By minimising the right of choice for young people, parents could make them feel depressed and lonely, which would cause a possible health problem due to their weakened immune system by being

demotivated

.

However

, if children do feel comfort for making their own choice without any pressure from their close relatives, it will give them a great motivation to explore the world and identify the consequences of their decisions by their own.

This

is because, even when people sometimes fail in achieving their goals, it may bring them

invaluable life experience

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the invaluable life experience

.

Conversely

, the fact that there

is

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are

no possibilities of failure due to the lack of freedom for children in making a

decisions

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decision

will give them untrue attitude towards nowadays' life. In conclusion, the attempts of parents to control the behaviour of their children could lead to

demotivation

and having health issues as a consequence, but an experience of wrong choices made by children might teach them a lot rather than not permitting them to have a right of free choice.