The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line
graph
gives information about how elderly
people
spend
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their leisure
times
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time
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between the years 1980 to 2010 in the United States. The
graph
gives certain activities that elderly
people
did
between
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during
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these years. These are reading, hiking, watching TV, surfing the internet and going to the theatre.
Firstly
, all of these activities drastically became more popular for the elderly in
this
time
span during the
1980
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1980s
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’s
to the
2010
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2010s
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’s
. Over
time
, the
activity
that elderly
people
started to enjoy was hiking
,
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and is an
activity
that most of them enjoyed spending their free
time
. The
graph
shows a
staggaring
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staggering
60% increase in hiking, where in 1980, hiking was at an
all
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time
low at 20% and a whopping 80% in late
2010
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2010s
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’s
. Hiking easily became the most popular
activity
amongst elderly
people
over
these
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the
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years.
On the other hand
, the
activity
that was most common for the elderly was watching
television
. The
graph
shows that
,
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watching
television
was the topmost and steadily growing leisure
activity
in the
1980
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1980s
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’s
at around 60% and grew until the
2000
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2000s
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’s
, when it slowly started to
decrease
from 70% to around 65%, and will continue to
decrease
in the near future.
This
decrease
in watching
television
was caused by the spike
growth
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of surfing the internet from about 15% in the
2000
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2000s
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’s
and an impressive 50% in 2010.
This
decrease
in watching
television
was mainly caused by the massive growth of the internet and online industry in the early
2000
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’s
. To summarize,
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