Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is?

Art
is
heart
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the heart
and soul of any
countries
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country's
countries'
culture
,
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,
also
It is
art
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the art
an art
of the respective
country
that define how deep the history of the
country
is.
Althougth
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Although
the
art
is so essential part
,
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,
it is vanishing day by day
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
of the introduction of
sciecnce
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
science
and technology.There are very less institutes that
actual
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actually
focus on
art
,
world
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the world
is moving to the era of
sceince
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
science
and technology diminishing the core values of the
country
. Taking India as an example, the
art
which has its deep roots in the
history
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history, however
however
, because of the increasing demands of
comfort of
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comfort, of
the people the world is moving
to
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into
science, technology and business.India
being
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is
a developing
country
where
serivce
work done by one person or group that benefits another
service
industries are the major players and the more focus is
on
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in
business because of which
art
are rarely
pracitised
a customary way of operation or behavior
practiced
in any kind of institution.
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