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people have little understanding of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons for this and how can people learn more about the natural world

#people #importance #world
It is true that human-beings are not well-
awared
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
 of the significant role of the natural world. While there are several reasons for
this
 lack, solutions addressing it may help
people inform about
Suggestion
inform people about
nature
. The crux of the matter is that the traditional life which is unclosed to the surroundings has been disappeared. As the dominant job has changed from agriculture to manufacture and service, people now majorly work indoors which batter them from contacting with wildlife.
Moreover
, in terms of culture, it seems that the very natural- related festivals are becoming faded away. Spring or harvest celebrations, for
expample
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
,
are no longer exist
Suggestion
are no longer existing
 in
cities even
Accept comma addition
cities, even
 in the countryside areas due to the fact that the entertainment of people seems to be replaced by electronic media.
However
, organizations and individuals can give a hand to
takle
accept as a challenge
tackle
take
this
 issue.
Firstly
,
govermant
Suggestion
the government
government
 should encourage environmentally friendly lifestyle and provides the community with news coverage that
broascast
message that is transmitted by radio or television
broadcast
 knowledge about
natural world
Suggestion
the natural world
.
In addition
, there are numerous volunteering organizations offer
prople
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 chances to discover wildlife and schools should incentive their students
eo
to a very great extent or degree
so
 be involved in environment clubs that enhance their insight of
nature
.
Secondly
, Each person can raise awareness of
nature
's importance by participating in
envinment
Suggestion
environmental
environment
 campaigns or leading a green
llife
a characteristic state or mode of living
life
live
leaf
 with the help of Internet in searching into natural world's information. In conclusion, that humanity is at
little
Suggestion
least
 understanding of
nature
 results from two main reasons,
however
, it can be dealt with some solutions adopted by both individuals and associations.

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