Some people think that one should plan detailed activities for their leisure time, others disagree with that. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that nowadays people are spending time on leisure activities to re-energize and to relax from regular occupational tasks.

Although

planning leisure time is preferred by some people, there are others who firmly believe that impromptu activities are the best way to utilize spare time.

This

essay makes comparison of the two and chooses the most preferred option.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

61 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

leisure time
detailed activities
making the most
variety of experiences
waste of time
over-scheduling
spontaneity
relaxation
increase stress
balanced approach
impromptu decisions

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Some people think that one should plan detailed activities for their leisure time, others disagree with that. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays. does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

One of your friends has just had a twin and for some reason you cannot go visit them in their town. You should write a letter to your friend and in your letter you should • congratulate them on the new-born babies • explain why you cannot go visit them • offer to help in case they need help.