The use of corporal punishment (physically hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Recently the use of corporal

punishment

in schools has been decreasing, nowadays it is almost non

existant

having existence or being or actuality

existent

, I believe that it should be completely banned. In the past the go to

punishment

was always physical, the phrase "beat out of him' comes to mind. Physical

punishment

has severe consequences both physical and psychological on children.

In addition

, research shows that people who have a background of abuse, and I consider physical

punishment

as abuse, are more likely to commit crime, abuse others, and have a psychological issues in the future, which defeats the purpose of correcting

behaviour

. Bad

behaviour

is usually just a call for attention, providing that attention, and channeling pupils' energies in more constructive ways

such

as sports, arts and debates.

Nevertheless

, there has to be a method of punishing bad

behaviour

, it is my opinion, that modern methods which include, removal of

privlidges

a special advantage or immunity or benefit not enjoyed by all

privileges

, detention, and community service work best. In conclusion, while corporal

punishment

does achieve some results,

newer safer

Accept comma addition

newer, safer

ways of punishing students are more capable of correcting bad

behaviour

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