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Band 6.5

Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#governments #effort #alternative #sources #energy
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In recent years, awareness regarding non-conventional
energy
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 sources has increased. Some believe that the governments should encourage greater
usage
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use
 of alternative sources of
energy
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 over traditional ones. I strongly agree with the premise and will be sharing my views on the same.
Firstly
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, non-conventional sources of
energy
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 are environment friendly.
This
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 is due to the fact that
energy
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 sources,
such
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 as
renewables
that can be renewed or extended
renewable
 don't cause pollution.
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example
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, solar
energy
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 can be harvested by installing solar panels and there is no pollution generated by solar panels. If
instead
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 of solar
energy
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, we use traditional forms of
energy
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,
then
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 the pollution generated by the plants is exponentially
high
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higher
, which damages the environment.
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, crude oil harvesting
plants mostly
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plants, mostly
 generate large amount of polluting gas as a byproduct of the
energy
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 generation process.
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, conventional sources of
energy
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 are limited in
nature
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. Since all traditional
energy
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 sources have been created due to change in the chemical
nature
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 of earth,
hence
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, they are limited in
nature
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 and can be
exhausted
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exhausting
.
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, as per current average usage of coal from the United States, all coal mines in the United Stats are expected to be depleted by the end of the 21st century.
Instead
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, alternative sources of
energy
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 are unlimited in
nature
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 and can be used without being worried about their availability in the future.
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example
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, wind
energy
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 is generated due to movement of wind on the surface of earth and the
energy
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 in unlimited in
nature
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. To conclude, governments should definitely increase effort for promotion of alternative
energy
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 sources since not only are they non-damaging to the environment, but they are
also
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 unlimited in
nature
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spearheading
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • transitioning
  • economic implications
  • government policies
  • research and development
  • national energy security
  • public-private sector collaboration
  • diversifying
  • environmental impact
  • clean energy
  • industry growth
  • dependence on imported fuels
  • alternative sources
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