Some people say that a person’s success is as a direct result of the way they were brought up by their parents. Do you agree or disagree?

The definition of the
success
varies from
person
to
person
.
Although
some people claim that an individual’s
success
is directly proportionate
with
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to
their parent’s upbringing, I,
however
, disagree with
this
view for two reasons. The
first
reason why the achievement of
success
is not
direct
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directly
connected with the upbringing of guardian is due to trying multiple time till it is achieved. While it is argued that everyone in their life strives for having a
success
, I believe that most of them quit in the middle and often do not give the
next
try
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trial
or
second chance
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second chances
a second chance
to tasting it. Consider Elon Musk as an example, who has experienced the
success
for
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in
sending the rocket in the Mars at his tenth attempt despite having the failure several times.
Thus
, a
person
should not quit before achieving their goal. The talent with hard
work
in the life is another reason. Whereas I concede that many of them do the hard
work
to become successful one day in the future, I would argue that hard
work
will not pay off until an individual has the talent in that particular field.
For example
, if any industrialist compelled their child to become a businessman despite having the talent of singing, their continuous efforts in the business would not give
fruitful result
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fruitful results
a fruitful result
.
Therefore
, any
person
could get the
success
with their hard
work
if they worked in the field where their interest is. In short, not only does an individual get
success
in their life because of multiple try, but
also
choosing
right field
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the right field
with an attitude of hard
work
.
Therefore
, I strongly disagree with the view of those who connect the
success
with the nurture of the family.
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