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The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons and what are the impacts?

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The culture of getting together at home, be it a lunch, dinner or breakfast is vanishing at a fast pace. It is barely evident that people belonging to a family brunch or dine together in
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 modern world. In my opinion, fast moving and self-centred busy lives of individuals, and minimal or no knowledge and emphasis on the importance of
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 get together practices are primary reasons for
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 fall outs which may result in serious issues
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 as no empathy or communication among the family members, obliteration of customs and associated problems. In olden days where there is no technology, the lives of the public are more focused, organized and limited.
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, in
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 new era where we run and work on machines, life has become mechanical, communication and exposure is global. There is no time for fellow human beings. Working hours are erratic and different from others. All these factors created an environment where we rarely have common free hours to interact and share a meal time.
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 situation resulted in poor information exchange about each other's lives, ultimately resulting in minimal bonding and empathy among them. The dining table is the best place to talk to others, educate oneself about any of the topics.
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 insights are not provided for
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 new generation human and it is one of the factors why personal congregations are not seen. In similar fashion, knowledge of cultural practices is
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 gained from conversations at the table, in olden days, which is not being obtained due to less frequent or no gatherings.
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 meetings are
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 indicative of the traditions of our country, not having those will not provide us the platform to learn about them. In conclusion, rapidly growing advancements in all the industries, globalization of markets and lack of enlightenment on traditions led to a society that has no time for friendly family gatherings.
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 forced people to stay in solitude with minimal interactions.
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, we are on the verge of losing focus of our culture.
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