In many societies , elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members. Do you agree?

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Nowadays, it is not uncommon to find geriatrics living in old age homes. Some people doesn't mind doing the same,

however

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others including myself d

oes not support

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do not support

this

notion.

Firstly

, It is one's moral duty to take care of his parents and grandparents who have left no stone unturned in making their wards'

life

better.

In other words

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hey have worked so hard and have endured sufferings all their

life

just to give their offsprings happy and stable

life

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o now when they need us at

this

tender age to give love and support, we should not back off.

Moreover

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f we look at the downsides of keeping pensioners in o

ld folk's

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an old folk's home

the old folk's home

home

, Not only they will have resentment as their children left them in

this

home

but

also

they will feel isolated

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This

may lead to depression and ultimately

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deteriorate their overall health. In some communities

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eople sending their older members of family at rest homes are often looked down upon by society,

this

also

means that it’s not a

cceptable thing

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an acceptable thing

to do.

Secondly

, having e

lderly person

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elderly people

an elderly person

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home

has proven to be b

oon,

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a boon

as they can share their hard earned experience with posterity and inculcate values in them as well

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Furthermore

, juveniles of the

home

always feel showered with love and affection by their grandparents and vice a versa.

In addition

this

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lderly

advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

elderly

people can take care of

home

while other members of the family a

re out as locked houses always attract

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always out as locked houses attract

are out as locked houses always attracting

are out as locked houses always attracted

have out as locked houses always attracted

are out as locked houses always attract

thieves. To conclude, there are plausible factors supporting the view that geriatrics should not be kept in old age homes to have a happy and healthy

life

, It’s a win -win situation for all the members of the family

then

Tue Dec 24 2019

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2Word repetition
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In many societies , elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members. Do you agree?

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some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a wast of time. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people think thats it's a good idea to socialise with work colleages during evenings and weekend. Other people, think it's important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, in many countries, young people do not stay with their parents. Instead , they move to another place to work or study. In your opinion, is this a positive or negative trend?

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?