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In many societies , elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members. Do you agree?

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: Nowadays, it is not uncommon to find geriatrics living in an old age
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. Some people doesn't mind doing the same,
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others, including myself do not support the notion.
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, It is one's moral duty to take care of his parents and grandparents who have left no stone unturned in making their wards' life happy.
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they have worked so hard and have endured sufferings all their life just to give their offsprings a better future
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So now, when they need us at
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 should not back off.
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if we look at the downsides of keeping pensioners in old folk's place, Not only they will have resentment as their children left them there
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 they will feel isolated too.
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people sending their older members of family at rest homes are often looked down upon by society, which
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, having elderly people in
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the house
 has proven to be boon as they can share their hard earned experience with posterity and inculcate values in them as well.
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, juveniles of the family always feel showered with love and affection by their grandparents and vice a versa.
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Elderly people can take care of abode while other members of the family are outside as locked houses always attract thieves. To conclude, there are plausible factors supporting the view that, to have a happy and healthy life, geriatrics should not be kept in old age homes
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It’s a win -win situation for all
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