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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Yes! Smoking
is injures
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has injured
 to health not for only
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smoker but
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the smoker, but
the smoker but
also
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 those who are near to
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smoker
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the smoker
smokers
a smoker
. Smoke is released by
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smoker
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a smoker
the smoker
 is very dangerous to normal people's I'm totally agree with
this
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 statement. It's a good thing ban in public places.
First
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 example
.
Accept space
.
 In my town
also
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baned
forbidden by law
banned
 smoking
.
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.
when
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When
 I'm standing
in
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at
bus stop
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the bus stop
a bus stop
 for my bus some people's
rogs
a member of the genus Canis (probably descended from the common wolf) that has been domesticated by man since prehistoric times; occurs in many breeds
dogs
are
introduces an alternative
or
 smoking near to stop.
all
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All
 the danger smoke
come
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comes
 to
near by
close at hand
nearby
 people we together complaint to police to stop smoking in public places
.
Accept space
.
 My
second
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 experience is when I'm in
thereater
from that time on
thereafter
theatre
 it was a break.
Smoker
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 start smoking all peoples are anger to them and complain to owner of
thereater
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on
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at
of
 the time onwards
strit
rigidly accurate; allowing no deviation from a standard
strict
straight
strait
 rules following. I conclude that youth don't attract to
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smoker it's
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smoker, it's
 not for publicity its damages our health. Parents take care of your children's. If parents don't play their role children's easily get affected to
this
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 kind of things
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