Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.

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The topic raises the controversial issue of whether the
mass
media and
internet
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the internet
are making the people's attention shorter,
although
it has overall positive effects. Indisputably, the
mass
media and
internet
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the internet
are making people lazy as well as perseverance in a specific subject is very low now-a-days.
Nevertheless
,
mass
media and
internet
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the internet
have created enormous opportunity to learn, communicate, sharing thoughts among peoples.
Thus I
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Thus, I
generally disagree with the opinion that
mass
media and
internet
making people lazy and they are not persistent in a particular field and would agree that the
mass
media and
internet
are creating positive effects on human as well as our society in a broad sense.
First
of all,
internet
and
mass
media
has created
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have created
the opportunity
to
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for
easy access of any information.
Now a days
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Nowadays
,
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,
the conception is very popular that "access to information''. I would like to point out that the
mass
media and
internet
are giving us the opportunity to gain any information what
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we
need to know or learn. To illustrate
,
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,
let us look at the example of tourism, if one would like to visit a new
country he
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country, he
or she can find the food,
culture etc
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culture, etc.
culture etc.
of the locality with the help of
internet
or he or she can have the related news about the country.
Consequently
, it is pretty obvious that the
internet
and
mass
media have overall positive effects.
Furthermore
, some people
says
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say
that,
internet
and
mass
media are making people lazy and our thought process is going down. Specifically, social media may be their main concern.
For
example they
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example, they
can say
,
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,
young people are passing more time on
facebook
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Facebook
,
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,
twitter etc. Both, common sense and personal experience told that
its
it is
it's
not true because recently we observed that some phenomenal revolution started
from
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with
social media like awareness in global warming. Admittedly, some people
says
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say
perseverance in a specific subject is very low
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
.
This
is true especially when it comes to some some research oriented
subject
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subjects
like mathematics, physics etc. In conclusion,
although
the opposite ideas are
good but
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good, but
not enough to justify the issue.

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