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What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in a large city?

#city
The advantages
and and
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 disadvantages of living in a large
city
is depends
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depend
 on
facilities
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the facilities
, requirements, and income of the person.
Firstly
, living in a large
city
 is
dream
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a dream
the dream
 of every person as facilitated by security like under the surveillance of
cctv
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CCTV
 for 24/7 is
first
 step be safe from dangerous animals
pplplor
 any harmful people
lll
affected by an impairment of normal physical or mental function
ill
Secondly
, one of big requirements people want is elevators which easily available in
large
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large cities
a large city
city
 for aged people and
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 one is campus and ground located
near by
close at hand
nearby
 to
enjoyed
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enjoy
to do
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doing
 walking surrounds with
educational society
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an educational society
 which is
best impact
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the best impact
 on children and youngsters. Move on to disadvantages of large
city
 people should have to alert with pollution is
the big
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the biggest
 disadvantage for all aged people get health issues and may have water issues because of
large
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a large city
large cities
the large city
city
.
Where as
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Whereas
 it has busy streets of visitors
.
Accept space
.
 As we can see the advantages of
large
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a large city
large cities
city
 is more than the disadvantages. Lots of
industrial area
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the industrial area
industrial areas
an industrial area
 and factories located and
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 industry
also
 located in on large
city
.
Accept space
.
 Most of the
person
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people
 want large
city
 to become easily available
schools colleges
Accept comma addition
schools, colleges
 or university,
mall grocery
Accept comma addition
mall, grocery
 store or most important thing is
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital
 and houses with good facilities When we look for maintenance of large
city
 we shouldn't have that
facilities
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facility
form
a giver or sender
from
government
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the government
 to cover all
city
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cities
 with clean and hygienic With plenty of plants for oxygen and
cleanthe
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clean the
 streets of
city
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the city
a city
cities
.

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