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Some people think that girls should take husband’s name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

#people #girls #husband’s #name #marriage #age #tradition
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The public seem in a real dilemma on whether possessing another half
's
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half's
name
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 once they live together for their whole life is mandatory to continue by appreciating conv
entianal role or
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the conventional role
conventional role
it is n
ot ne
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is not
cessary in these days.Acquiring hus
bands
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the husband's name
name
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 will virtually turn over a new leaf on the whole society by not turning a blind eye into
tradition
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 and helping people to recognise their status even though it might be create long
name
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.In order to arrive
last
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 but not least consideration, I will mull both aspects over as follows like the coin flips over two side
.
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sides
 In terms of not possessing husb
and's
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a husband's name
name
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 which is one of the component part
of
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parts
the society,it
c
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ould help girls and mother to not hesitate with their
name
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 by living with their child's father.In which meant they dono
t hav
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do not
e to write down their
name
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 with full of long names and their
name
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 might be more
easier to
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easier
easiest
more easy
call.According to the recent investigation, the most of the young indi
viduals especially inf
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individuals, especially
ant student of school confront issues as they have to introduce themselves to their counterparts by saying and writing their long
name
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.Despite
this
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,not
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,
purs
ueing tra
following in order to overtake or capture or as accompaniment to such pursuit
pursuing
d
itional approach of
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a traditional approach
the traditional approach
traditional approaches
naming will force the public to acquire humble memory. With regards to the conv
entional
following accepted customs and proprieties
conventional
name
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 granting
tradition
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 which have been followed for the thousands of centuries, anti
que nameing style is
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the antique naming style
antique naming style
not only intended to educate their children with good remembering skill but
also
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 proposed to respect
tradition
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 and history.To cite my mother as an example, when she was a young beautiful girl,she
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,
have to take my father's
name
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 by throwing away her
name
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.
Moreover
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,she
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,
was overly nervous about that and did a some research in order to grasp genu
ine truth.
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the genuine truth
Subsequently
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 ,on
ce
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,
she realised that she receive a blissful honour ,my
m
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,
om
hav
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e never refused to grant his
name
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 be respecting their pros
tigious his
having an illustrious reputation; respected
prestigious
tory and honour. Taking everything into conclusion,pur
s
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,
uing the conv
entional way
following accepted customs and proprieties
conventional
 of naming and respecting
tradition
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 by not burying a he
ad int
at or in the front
ahead
o the sand help people to realise the value of history as well as honour seeing that not granting the
name
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 by avoiding the long
name
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 affects adversely to the juveniles skill of memo
rise alo
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memorization
ng with demolishing the value of
tradition
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.

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