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The chart compares the proportions of Australian males and females in six
age
 categories who were physically active regularly in 2010. Roughly speaking, close to half Australian adults did some kinds of physical activities routinely in 2010. Middle aged females were the most physically active, proportionally, while males who were 35-44 did
the least physical
Suggestion
the less physical
 activity. In the youngest
age
 categories (15-24 years), almost half Australian men but only 47.7% women did physical activity in 2010.
However
, it was different for
25
Suggestion
the 25
-34
age
 group. In
this
 group, men were less active than females, and
this
 trend was still for 35-44
age
 category. Actually, the gap between two sexes were more dramatic in
this
 group, with the proportions of 52.5% of females and 39,5% of males. Between the ages of 45 and 64, the figure for male physical activity rose to 43,1%, while the proportion of active females remained around 8% higher, at 53%.
Finally
, the percentages of Australian women and men aged 65 and over who exercised on a regular basis were almost identical, at approximately 47.

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