Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows a good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment.

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However
, I would argue that televised talent shows are the excellent prospect to find talented people. It is proved by several TV programs from many parts of the world.
Firstly
, American Idol selects the best 24 talented people from 24,000 participants.
Then
, the judges of the program choose the three best singers to sign a long broadcast contract with
television channel
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a television channel
.
Secondly
, Britain’s Got Idol has finished a chain of complicated selection processes to select talented people throughout
United Kingdom
Suggestion
the United Kingdom
.
As a result
, the program succeeded to screen 12 of a thousand skilled people.
Furthermore
, the selected talented people show their talent regularly in the Local British Television program for several years until they get a new contract in the different channel.
Lastly
, Indian Idol Junior, a talented TV show for children, has succeeded to produce
children
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child
artists in India. Those programs are exactly finding real skilled people, while the entertainment is just a bonus for their programs. The aforementioned evidence shows that television programs which are showing talented people are the best for entertaining, while I strongly believe that those are the best concept to find talented people. The worst possibility that the programs fail to show the talented people
who
objective case of "who" ("who" is also often used in the objective)
whom
public expected unless those programs have explained that it is just for amusement

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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