The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. do you agree or disagree?

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the online shopping is

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issue will lead at the end to all shops in our countries to collapse. I quite agree with

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lead to reduce shopping in markets and malls

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some people doesn't like to spend time for shopping and prefer to take their

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. Sellers can advertise to their store in networks or boards or magazine. They can make big sales with exceptional prices

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Topic Vocabulary:

e-commerce
brick-and-mortar
physical stores
online retailers
retail apocalypse
digital economy
consumer behavior
sustainability
commercial landscape
high-street
consumer trends
augmented reality
showrooms
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