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The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different school in four country in 2001.

The bar chart below show the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different school in four country in 2001.
#bar #show #hours #teacher #school #four #country
the pie
chart
describe
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describes
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study
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the study
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hours
of
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at
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school
 in 2001.
this
 pie
chart
compare
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compares
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Correct article usage
the four
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four nation
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four-nation
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 together . as per the representation of
chart
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the chart
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 higher secondary
study
hours
is
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are
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 major
compare
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compared
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 to primary
as well as
 lower secondary
school
.in
usa
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USA
 all part of
school
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the school
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study
hours
 all higher than
other
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in other
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 countries. in
spain
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Spain
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 and
iceland
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Iceland
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neglecgible
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negligible
 difference in
highschool
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high school
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study
hours
.in japan primary , secondary and higher secondary
school
 hour
difference
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differences
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very
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are very
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 small.
usa
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USA
spend
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spends
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 nearly 1200
hours
for
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on
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 higher education
study
 in
school
as well as
also
 spend 1000
hours
 in lower secondary
school
.
spain
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Spain
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 and
iceland
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Iceland
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 teach in
highschool
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high school
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 approximately 900
hours
as
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in as
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 compared to
usa
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USA
a
decrease
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decreases
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300
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of 300
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hours
.japan only
teach
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teaches
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 600
hours
 in
primary
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the primary
a primary
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. as per the
chart
 show result is
usa
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is
 more worried about
study
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studying
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 but
same
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some
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 other countries
also
 teach
student
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the student
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 as per
them
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their
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 ability.
study
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the study
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 is important for every
student
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student's
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 life
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, study, hours, school, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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