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fish and meat consumption rate in one European country

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 line graph illustrates the amount consumed per gram per person per week in some types of
m
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eat including
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meat, including
fish,
l
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,
amb,
b
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,
eef and
chicken
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, between 1979 and 2004 in a single European country. Overall, Fish is the least kind of
meat
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 consumed by the people with stable minimal decline,
in contrast
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 to
c
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hicken which
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the chicken, which
the chicken which
is p
opulus
densely populated
populous
popular
meat
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 that shows a dramatic usage rise. In 1979, Beef was commonly used with over 200 g
ram
Suggestion
grams
per person per week while lamb is the
secondly
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 used
meat
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 with about 150GPW
.
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.
c
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hicken
the flesh of a chicken used for food
Chicken
represents only just below 150GPW. w
hile
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While
fish expenditure was relatively low just above 50GPW. Over the progress of years up to 2004, significant changes have o
ccured,
come to pass
occurred
 the consumption of
chicken
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 shows a steep incline to reach about 250GPW. i
n
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In
contrary, both beef and lamb usage declined d
ramaticaly
in a very impressive manner
dramatically
to reach just above 100GPW and around 70GPW respectively. w
hile
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While
fish keeps its consumption rate slightly declined to just b
elwo
in a position lower than
below
50
GPW
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