Some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best at or are interested in. To what extent do you agree.

One can stand nowhere without education. Education plays a major role in moulding life,
however some
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however, some
people thinks that students have to learn all the subjects at school level some believes that they should concentrate on subjects which they like the most. I completely disagree with
this
statement, children have to study every
subjects
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subject
to mould themselves. The
first
and foremost reason why teenagers have to study every
subjects
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subject
is, at school age student are not much matured to select their choices of subject which might be
bad
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the worst
option in selecting their career. As per the recent survey of adolescence in London many children are not aware of
importance
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the importance
of subjects and how it helps to choose
further
career
oppurtinities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
. As per the report at
this
age 80
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age, 80
% of pupils are unsteady,
for
example when
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example, when
after watching a film some have to become an actor but
next day
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the next day
their mind changes after
visiting to doctor
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visiting the doctor
visiting to the doctor
visiting to a doctor
and get diverted towards medical field and
hence
it is not a good idea to make
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to study
selectd
chosen in preference to another
selected
subjects. The another cogent reason behind
this
is there are many subjects which have very less career
oppurnities but
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opportunities, but
opportunities but
are based on knowledge and contains theory. These subjects are highly ignored by
majority
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the majority
of pupils which can limit their knowledge and they might face
diffulcities
an effort that is inconvenient
difficulties
on
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in
language and unaware about their cultures, which is the biggest disadvantage of
nation
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the nation
nations
a nation
. From my point of view every
subjects
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subject
has its uniqueness and
importance so
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importance, so
it is advantageous to gain basic knowledge in every field.

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