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Learning is like nature—it’s all around us, even on a subconscious level. Our brains are built to absorb, filter and store information. Discussion about learning could actually stimulate some English learning amongst the students! A few questions that are suitable are: How important is learning? Why?Besides English, what are you currently learning?What things are you good/bad at learning? Why?What would you most like to learn?What is the most difficult part of learning? Why?

#nature—it’s #level #brains #filter #store #information #discussion #english #students #questions #part
Learning is like nature. I don't know what
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 But I think learning is like watering a plant and it's related to
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 something. Practicing, experimenting,
reading
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helps
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 these producers.
For example
, in Memrise -an
English
 learning app- when you learn a new word, it's like you put down a seed and with every
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 it grows to
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. 🔘It's all around us, even on a subconscious level. Everybody exposes 2 million bits of
information
 per second that the brain absorbs
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by the 5 senses. Our consciousness can absorb and filter only 134 bits of
information
, because our consciousness is limited to focus,
perceive
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 and data processing. The most of data
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 by
subconscious
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the subconscious
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. 88% of our daily
works
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 and activities are managed by the subconscious and unconscious. New
skills
 learning and new
information
 memorizing
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in
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subconscious
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the subconscious
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 level. They store- both
information
 and
skills
 -store in our subconscious and unconscious for a long time. 🔘 discussion about learning could actually stimulate some
English
 learners amongst the students! Learners should consider their abilities and don't compare themselves with other learners. Setting a goal helps you to keep
practicing
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.
Every body
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Everybody
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 is different and unique in learning. There are different styles of learning, but you shouldn't restrict your learning to rigid forms of learning. Some researchers think learning styles, I mean, visual, aural, logical, social, solitary and so on kill creativity in learning. If you change your mind about
yourselves
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 in learning, you can try things in new ways. 🔘How important is learning? Why? When people learn, they gain confidence in trying new things and they can improve. Learning changes people to
qualified
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 version of themselves. It helps organization to be more productive, helps people make a better world by improving their vision,
skills
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skills
,
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 them to be calmer, wiser, happier and more resilient. 🔘I'm bad at learning
skills
 that they need to work with hands or need to balance and coordination between eyes and hands. There's a saying in Brain Science that says "neurons that fire together, wire together. The more they fire together, the more they wire together ". It means the more someone is actively involved, the more learn. In other
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word
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, "practice makes perfect ". 🔘 What's the most difficult part of learning? Why? Phonetics, using grammar correctly, understanding native speakers in conversation through a video and
English
 spelling.
English
 spelling is difficult because it includes words from many languages and some very very old words. In fact, about 75% of
English
 spelling
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 regular.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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