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Both The Poor And The Rich Find Accessibility Into University Difficult

#accessibility #university
Nowadays, young people seek
education
. Some believe that the wealthy can access higher
education
 easier that the poor. I somewhat agree to
this
, as finances play a crucial role in student life.
First
 and foremost, offsprings of prosperous parents are more likely to get into university. They possess the ability to pay high tuition fees without any additional work as their parents provide financial support. By doing
this
 rich students have more time to study, whereas lower-class or middle-class students have to make their own way to higher
education
. Saving money is often not enough and various part-time jobs must be taken.
On the other hand
, nowadays many top universities admire talent over money.
Therefore
, they provide scholarships and other financial support for those in need.
As a result
, admissions are offered for students who meet selection criteria, no matter their background.
This
 way only the talented are sponsored according to their academic performance. All in all, many strive for a university degree.
However
, children from affluent families are able to access it with ease and poor ones have to put an abundance of effort to maintain a higher
education
. Nowadays attitude towards financial wealth is changing and talent is admired more than income.
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