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The diagram below shows how electricity is generate in a hydroelectric power station

The diagram below shows how electricity is generate in a hydroelectric power station
#electricity #power #station
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The graph describes
aout
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about
 how electricity is produced by a hydroelectric
power
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station
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. The
station
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 works
backward
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 and forward in a cycle for using
river
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water
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at
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during
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daytime
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the daytime
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 and
night
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. Looking at the picture in detail, the dam collects the river
water
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 in
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir
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 in
day
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 time, which will close at
night
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. The
water
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 flows to generate electricity in
daytime
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the daytime
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 at
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power
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the power
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station
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. The
water
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 runs through the reversible turbines in the generator of
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power
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the power
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station
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 in
daytime
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the daytime
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. It produces electricity by
power
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 line in
national
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the national
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 grid.
On the other hand
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, the
remain
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remaining
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water
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 will flow to
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the lower-level
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lower-level
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lower level
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 of
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reservoir
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the reservoir
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 and
pumping
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pump
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water
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 into
high-level
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the high-level
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reservoir
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 through
generator
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the generator
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 of
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power
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the power
a power
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station
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 at
night
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. And
then
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, the rest of
unused
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the unused
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water
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flow
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flows
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 back to
high-level
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the high-level
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reservoir
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 and keep
it
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apply
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at
night
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 and continue a cycle
at
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in
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 daytime

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, station, water, night, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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