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Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue their development. Some people argue that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Spending public
money
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for
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 the
development
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 of other
countries
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 is a hotly debated topic these days.
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 some people argue that international organizations should help
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countries
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 financially, others believe that they should be provided with practical help and advice
instead
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. In my view, it is more important to assist poor
countries
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 in a practical way. On the one hand, some people say that financial help is crucial in bringing
development
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in
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 a country. The developing
nations
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 are well aware of the problems they face, and,
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, know how to solve those problems. In fact, they have complete and effective plans on where and how to spend the
money
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 they receive from international organizations. Indeed, every citizen of a country knows all the obstacles in their nation’s
development
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.
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, they should be given financial assistance so that they can develop their
countries
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according to
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 their own ambitions.
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, others opine that practical aid is more important for developing
nations
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 than financial aid.
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countries
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 often do not understand how to efficiently spend the
money
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 they receive from others.
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, mismanagement of funds occurs, and donations or public
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 is wasted.
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, the organizations that work for the
development
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 of poor
countries
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 on the global level should provide practical assistance to them.
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 will not only assist the developing
nations
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 in overcoming the hurdles, which they do not understand how to solve, in their
development
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,
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 but will
also
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 avoid any chances of funds embezzlement or mismanagement. In conclusion, people have contradictory views on whether to help poor
countries
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 financially or practically. In my opinion, practical skills should be imparted to these
nations
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, so that they can contribute to their country’s
development
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 and learn techniques that could help them in future as well.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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