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Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

#manager #bus #company
I am writing
this
 to bring
into
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 your notice that, over the
last
 two weeks, we are facing multiple issues with the area bus service.
Firstly
, the
buses
 are breaking down on the way to our office on
frequent
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 basis.
Secondly
, some of the
buses
 are in very poor condition,
for example
, the windows and doors are either broken or not present. Due to these problems, we are not able to reach
office
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 on time, and
that is
 impacting our work life. Apart from
this
, in
this
 chilly winter, it is really hard to travel in the
buses
 without windows. We not only feel cold on the way to
office
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 but
also
 fall sick more frequently.
In addition
 to
this
, lots of the people try to board the bus even when it starts running as there are no doors in some of the
buses
.
This
 results in accidents and
hazardous
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 to people. I would like to recommend the introduction of some new
buses
 so that we do not face
such
 issues on regular basis.
Moreover
, the existing
buses
 should be sent to
service
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a service
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 centre for detailed inspection and should be maintained properly to avoid
such
 issues in days to come. I hope, you would pay attention to my request and help us in resolving
this
 situation.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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