Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

These days, the amount of assault on media is growing. While some people argue that
this
trend will undoubtedly lead humans to dangerous future, others claim that it has no damaging effect on the society. I believe that in most cases, media disorder doesn't affect people's behaviour.
Firstly
, I think that people act from their motives, regardless what they see on the television.
That is
to say, if someone intends to do harm to somebody,
that is
not because of watching TV or playing computer games, but due to that person's character and education.
Although
it is generally considered that violent media accustoms viewer to cruelty, I doubt
this
opinion. In my view, reasonable and intelligent people treat others humanely irrespective of what they see or hear in fictional stories.
Moreover
, video games and television may even reduce social disturbance by providing a safe outlet for aggressiveness.
In other words
, truculent people may fight in virtual reality
instead
of evincing their combative spirit in the real world.
This
may not only help those people, but
also
reduce the level of social bloodshed in long-term perspective.
Finally
, despite many claims and assumptions about the negative effects of television and computer games I have never seen any proven connection between violent media and illegal activities in social life. Taking everything into consideration, I would say that violence in contemporary media has no substantial influence on people's behaviour. Television and computers are not the main factors that shape personal character, and they can even be useful in reducing the level of violence.
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