In many countries, the quality of life in the large cities is worsening. What possibly can cause this problem? What measures can be taken to resolve it?

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Many cities across the globe are witnessing a decline in the quality of
life
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essay will look at the reasons behind
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and give some possible measures to overcome the problems of city dwellers.
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, an
ever increasing
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population and migration of
people
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from rural to urban areas have caused congestion.
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has led to growth in the
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number
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of
slums
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in some areas.
Slums
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as we know do not have any basic
facilities
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like hospitals, sanitation,
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drinking water and are a hotbed of diseases.
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of living in unhygienic conditions, not only
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people
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in
slums
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suffer from serious health problems, but
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aid
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the cause of
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the spreading
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flu
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and other viruses.
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, hectic
schedule
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schedules
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and excessive
workload
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workloads
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also
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hamper the quality of
life
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. To explain it
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, extended working hours,
long
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and long
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commuting
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times
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leave urban with hardly ever time to
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in recreational activities, which are indispensable to ensure the
well being
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of human beings.
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, there has been a sharp rise in the prevalence of psychiatric problems among
people
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in large cities. To look at the possible measures, the government should develop affordable accommodation
facilities
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to accommodate an ever-growing number of city dwellers. There should be strict restrictions on
building
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the building
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of
slums
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and
a
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stern action
need
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to
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against offenders. In order to control the influx of rural migrants, the government should focus on the development of the countryside. Gyms and recreational
facilities
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like parks, gardens
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yoga centres, etc should
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be constructed by the government and there should be no charge to use them.
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,
positives
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the positives
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of good health should be highlighted, asking
people
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to follow a balanced
life
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,
unfettered
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the unfettered
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growth of
population
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the population
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, stressful lifestyle and lack of basic
facilities
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in certain areas have made
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life
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worse in cities. Undoubtedly, if
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situation is to be improved, effective measures have to be taken.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Overpopulation
  • Infrastructure
  • Pollution
  • Housing shortages
  • Rental and property prices
  • Traffic congestion
  • Public transportation
  • Deforestation
  • Urban sprawl
  • Mental health
  • Economic disparity
  • Waste management
  • Environmental impact
  • Public health
  • Recreational areas
  • Wealth gap
  • Cost of living
  • Lifestyle
  • Stress
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