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In past the role of teacher was to provide information. Today, students have access to wide sources of information. There is, therefore, no role of teacher in modern education. Do you agree or disagree

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With the advancement of technologies, a plethora of online resources
have been created
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has been created
, through which a learner can educate himself
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herself. Now the
internet
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 is the main resource to provide
abundance
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an abundance
 of
information
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. In my opinion, I agree with
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 statement.A
teacher
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 is
one
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 of the most important pillars of
student
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 life after his
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her parents. Providing knowledge and various
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 is the job of a
teacher
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.
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, in modern education, a
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 always needs a
teacher
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 to educate him. Technology has changed in recent
years particularly
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years, particularly
 in education fields. An abundance of websites and articles are there on the
internet
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. A
student
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 can find every topic from the
internet
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 without the help of others.
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, A
student
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 can learn JAVA
(
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a programming language) from
Youtube
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YouTube
 and various
vlogs
a shared on-line journal where people can post daily entries about their personal experiences and hobbies
blogs
villages
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he does not need a
teacher
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.
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,
one
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 can test his
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her ability on the
internet
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 as well. Many students
got succeed
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got to succeed
 without a
teacher
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's aid.
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On
 the
internet
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one
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 can find a plethora of
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 about a particular topic from various sources,
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however in
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however, in
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's case,
one
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 can get merely limited
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 within the syllabus. Some individuals argue the
teacher
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 is the best medium to educate a child
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student
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.
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, they do not know that whatever the
teacher
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 teaches, those things
are already written
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are already writing
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 with a better explanation.
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, a
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 can learn at night as well. In conclusion,
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 teachers
are provided
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have provided
are providing
provide
information
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, with the advancement of the
internet
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 and blogs
one
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 can easily get pieces of
information
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 without a
teacher
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.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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