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In past the role of teacher was to provide information. Today, students have access to wide sources of information. There is, therefore, no role of teacher in modern education. Do you agree or disagree

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With the advancement of technologies, a plethora of online resources
have been created
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has been created
, through which a learner can educate himself
/
herself. Now the
internet
 is the main resource to provide
abundance
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an abundance
 of
information
. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 statement.A
teacher
 is
one
 of the most important pillars of
student
 life after his
/
her parents. Providing knowledge and various
information
 is the job of a
teacher
.
Moreover
, in modern education, a
student
 always needs a
teacher
 to educate him. Technology has changed in recent
years particularly
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years, particularly
 in education fields. An abundance of websites and articles are there on the
internet
. A
student
 can find every topic from the
internet
 without the help of others.
For example
, A
student
 can learn JAVA
(
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(
a programming language) from
Youtube
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YouTube
 and various
vlogs
a shared on-line journal where people can post daily entries about their personal experiences and hobbies
blogs
villages
 in free of cost
also
 s
/
he does not need a
teacher
.
Furthermore
,
one
 can test his
/
her ability on the
internet
 as well. Many students
got succeed
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got to succeed
 without a
teacher
's aid.
In
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On
 the
internet
one
 can find a plethora of
information
 about a particular topic from various sources,
however in
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however, in
teacher
's case,
one
 can get merely limited
information
 within the syllabus. Some individuals argue the
teacher
 is the best medium to educate a child
/
student
.
However
, they do not know that whatever the
teacher
 teaches, those things
are already written
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are already writing
 on the
internet
 with a better explanation.
In addition
, a
student
 can learn at night as well. In conclusion,
although
 teachers
are provided
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have provided
are providing
provide
information
, with the advancement of the
internet
 and blogs
one
 can easily get pieces of
information
 without a
teacher
.
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