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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organisation. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Multinational organisations can be found in most major cities around the world these days.
Although
 working for
such
 a
company
 provides the opportunity to mix with people from a variety of cultural backgrounds, I would argue that
this
 is not necessarily the best way to learn about other cultures. There is no doubt that for some people, working for a multinational organisation will enhance their understanding of other cultures. The
first
 reason is that in a multinational organisation one can learn about the customs and traditions of other countries through mixing with people from different backgrounds who
work
 in the
company
 or in liaising with colleagues abroad. Exposure to other languages is
also
 likely, something that gives a much greater depth of understanding of a culture. There may
also
 be the chance to relocate to
work
 in another country, which would mean complete immersion in that culture.
However
, there are a number of reasons that it is not necessarily the best way.
Firstly
, there is no guarantee that you will be a person who gets
such
 exposure to other cultures as it depends on your position within the
company
. Not all employees have roles where they regularly mix with other cultures.
Also
, there are
also
 other excellent ways to achieve
such
 a goal.
For example
, many people these days travel the world, and
this
 is an opportunity to meet and spend time with people from other countries. It is
also
 possible to do voluntary
work
 with organisations and charities that
work
 in other countries, something that would mean you meet a mix of people rather than just those who
work
 in companies. In conclusion, despite the potential ways in which working for a multinational
company
 can result in contact with people from other cultures, I believe that it cannot be assumed it is the best way as there are other options to do
this
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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