The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts describe the three types of
nutrients
, namely sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar which are consumed in the USA. A glance at the pie charts
reveal
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that those
nutrients
are eaten mostly at
luch
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lunch
and
dinner
. As a matter of
facts
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, consuming
a great deal of
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a lot of
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such
nutrients
will harm
the
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health. It can be clearly seen that just over 40% of sodium is eaten at
dinner
,
while
only 29% is consumed at lunch. The exact percentages, both are 14% of sodium, are taken for breakfast and snacks. The same proportion almost happens in the consumption of saturated fat. Most of the saturated fat is fed at
dinner
. Followed by lunch which
use
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26% of saturated fat. Snacks and breakfast
also
use saturated fat as the ingredients with percentages of 21% and 16% respectively.
Suprisingly
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Surprisingly
,
majority
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the majority
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of added sugar is used for snacks (42%).
Dinner
applies 23% of added sugar.
Such
nutrients
can be found as much as 19% at lunch and 16% at breakfast.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, dinner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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