Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?
Nowadays intelligent
people
are respected around the world. Although
a few public considered
that Wrong verb form
consider
success
is the best measure, others deny and believe that there are a few other ways to measured
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measure
talents
. In my opinion, I personally think that Fix the agreement mistake
talent
success
is the significance policy for intelligence because success
give
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gives
the
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apply
confidence
as well as
push
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pushes
the
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people
in
a new happier Change preposition
to
life
as well
. Rephrase
apply
Firstly
, people
got the
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apply
confidence
from being successful. In other words
, success
always appropriate the human for doing well every time and people
always try their best in every work of life
. For example
, while
my brother got GPA
FIVE in Correct article usage
a GPA
Secondary
Certificate Examination, he again started to Correct article usage
the Secondary
putting
his hundred percent effort, Wrong verb form
put in
as a result
, he earn
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earned
GPA
FIVE again in the Higher Secondary Examination. Correct article usage
a GPA
Besides
, success
always give
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gives
the
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apply
confidence
to people
for doing well all time
. Correct article usage
the time
Secondly
, success
made happier life
of people
.
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happier.
In other words
, society always respect
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respects
the
successful Correct article usage
apply
people
in the
society Correct article usage
apply
as well as
in the field of work, for instance
, successful people
got
the best job opportunities Wrong verb form
get
in
all over the world because of Change preposition
apply
only
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apply
the
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their
success
of people
. As a result, they can build their future happier. Moreover
, a happier future is important for the family of successful people
as well. In conclusion, succeeding in life
is beneficial in various ways. However
I think that being successful is the best way for intelligence. Because it always Add a comma
However,
bring
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brings
the
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apply
confidence
as well as
manufactured
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manufactures
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apply
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
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