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Now a days many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization • Why might this be the case? • What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Currently, the job environment is changing. Most people want to be self employed. They like to become en
trepreneur.
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an entrepreneur
entrepreneurs
Because of three basic reasons. The
first
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 reason I want to discuss is unemployment. Governments are not able to give jobs to people. Either they have no resources. Like government
lack
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 money to provide jobs to
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for
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e young g
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the younger
eneration. Or they
lack
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organization
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. There may be many different departments in the government where new employees are re
quired but d
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required, but
ue to
lack
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 of co-ordination between departments. They are unable to advertise and hire new people. So people are trying to become self-employed. We can easily see the example of Ja
k m
a man who serves as a sailor
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,
the month following April and preceding June
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one of the main sh
are holder o
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shareholders
shareholder
f Ali ba
ba o
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Baba
nline
business
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. He started his own company when he became dissatisfied with unemployment. The
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 reason of unemployment is Hugh return on investment. It means that you can earn more money when you have your own
business
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 as compared to working for a company where you should be only given some amount of monthly wages. You in
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 en
vironment weather y
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environment, whether
environment whether
ou
work
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 extremely hard or you do your job normal in both cases. The wages are same. So people feel frustrated about
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 be
havior o
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
f em
ployee.
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the employee
an employee
employees
The
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 reason is politics in
side
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in
organization
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 and corruption. We can easily see fo
rm o
a giver or sender
from
ur environment that when some own talk highly of boss and managers in their presences. They ride the stairs of
organization
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 more rapidly as compared to the people who
work
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 hard. Sometime there is rivalry inside the
organization
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 and new people are treated badly. So they left their job and either search for new jobs or make their own
business
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. The main disadvantages of self-implement is taking ri
sk.
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a risk
risks
One might get failed and lose all his money and waste their time. If we invest in something where we
lack
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 experience. We may fall head down. Hard
work
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 is required in
t
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at
he beginning of developing
business
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. On should
work
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 hard for twenty four hours
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 to start his
business
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 and make new customer. After some months either the
business
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 will boost or disappear.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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