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Fossil fuels (e.g. coals, oil and gas) are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative sources of energy (e.g. wind and solar) have been encouraged for use by some countries. To what extent is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays fossil fuels are the major source of
energy
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.
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, some countries promoting renewable
energy
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,
such
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 as solar, wind or tidal. As far as I am concerned, the use of
alternative
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energy
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 sources is a positive evolution,
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 the idea of fossil fuel should not be abandoned.
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 and foremost,
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energy
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 has a number of benefits. One of them is the ability of renewal. Nobody knows exactly when fossil fuel will reach its
last
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, but one thing is clear, the renewable
energy
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 sources are guaranteed to stay for longer. Some may argue that
alternative
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energy
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 needs more investment, due to modern technologies required.
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, research has shown that these investments pay off over a short period of time.
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, the
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energy
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 sources possess a downside. Solar and wind power is not reliable, due to the fact that they depend on the weather.
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 venture beans only rotates if there is enough of a strong wind and the solar panels do not operate at night and provide less
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 during cloudy days. In conclusion fossil fuels are considered a traditional way of generating
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,
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 the popularity of
alternative
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 methods is rising every day.
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 they possess some cons I firmly believe that renewable
energy
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 is a positive development for humanity.
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