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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem

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Exercise is an absolutely to being fit in all aspects of life.
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, a number of people either get a few minutes or could not
obtained
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obtain
 the time for exercise because of loads of
work
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. As for the leisure time, their brains are still occupied by the thought of completion of
work
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 caused them to develop various health issues, whether they are psychological
are
introduces an alternative
or
 physiological which eventually harm people's life style.
This
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 essay will suggest some solution that helps to improve health as well as efficiency of
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.
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first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 and foremost, the pressure
have been developed
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has been developed
 as the amount of
work
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 increases.
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, if you
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are given
 a task to submit the project report just in two days along with the whole production expenses and so on, It is getting frustrated due to the hectic schedule.
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, the facilities of gym are quite far away from officers and charged heavily for people.
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, working out
is required
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requires
 lots of efforts so that people are
discourage
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discouraged
 to do any physical activity after
work
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. In spite of that,
work
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 hours should be fixed. Through introducing gym facilities within the premises of office building could have
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benefits
 for employees.
motivate
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Motivate
 them provide some valuable time between working hours to compose yourselves by doing short workout.
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, membership card facilities
encourages
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encourage
 people to get affordable and various exercise plans started from beginner to advanced level in the supervision of
experience trainer
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an experienced trainer
experienced trainer
experienced trainers
.
To sum of all
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 the
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statements
, authority should take some renowned measures for the sake of healthy societies.
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, break down the
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 and begin the regime of exercise to get the best efficiency and productivity from workers.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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