More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate in order to look for work. What will be consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

As a result
of
industrial revolution
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the industrial revolution
, most of people are immigrating to the metropolitan because they want to get a job which is
more higher
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higher
pay than doing agriculture. But
this
population movement will affect
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
economies
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Economies
in their country like
increasing value
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the increasing value
of things, so
government
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governments
have to help them
to do
Accept comma addition
to, do
not immigrate to other cities like
make
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making
laws and make some recreation place or provide machines/hand tools for them. The reason why
government
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governments
the government
have to encourage people who are doing agriculture is that it can affect the
countries
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country's
economy. If most of farmers give up to cultivate their crops and follow job which is
more higher
Suggestion
higher
pay than what they do, of course the
prise
the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
price
prize
perils
of crops will boom about twice times or more than twice because if the amount of supply decline, demand will increase.
In addition
, if the value of things
increase
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increases
,
the
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The
lives of civilians will be difficult
to
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for
them. In my view, efficiency solution what can the
government
can
do are
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be
two: make laws for them to live
comfortable
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comfortably
and provide some store to keep their crops, tools or machines to make cultivate easily.
Firstly
, the
government
can contribute the tools or provide some machines for the farmers. If they did it, farmers can create
more high
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higher
highest
quality crops.
Furthermore
, they can create some laws or help them like increase the
prise
the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
price
of agriculture prize, build some recreation and
relaxable
place and give some money for them to thank for farming. If the
prise
the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
price
praise
perils
of
prize
Suggestion
a prize
the prize
which is from farmers, they will work
more harder
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harder
and there is no reason to go metropolitan than before when the cost is low. If the
relaxable
buildings made by
government
are placed
near by
close at hand
nearby
farmers, they will just
stay their houses
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stay in their houses
.
Also
, If they get some money from
government's tax
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the government's tax
, they can refresh their mind. In a word, everyone have to encourage the farmers and thank to them. If the people's mind
become
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becomes
like farmers are useless the increasing cost of crops and immigrating people
form
a giver or sender
from
countryside to city will be
happened
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happening
.

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