Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some argue that individuals with important careers get paid far less than any famous sports personality, which is biased.
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, sportsmen and women train throughout the year to make the
country
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proud, I think other important professions do contribute to the
country
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's development and fame and deserve to earn more
money
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than they do now. Be it any sport - team or individual, famous players like Christiano Ronaldo, Virat Kohli, Rafael Nadal are paid by the government for their training and other sports facilities so that they can represent the nation on international grounds. Apart from the centre, team players,
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receive
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from sports clubs across the globe to represent the club for various matches or leagues.
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, Messi gets paid millions of dollars
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for
Barcelona Football Club for competing in one league. Not to forget, these sports professionals play many leagues throughout the year.
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, since most of these sportsmen are
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
, they
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earn
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advertisements they do and for their social media posts. There are professions like researchers, scientists, data scientists who spend their time studying and working hard to achieve goals that are beneficial for the
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. Their success at work is one of the reasons why the
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earns its fame and success, like Nobel prize winners Abhijeet Banerjee and Ester Banerjee. These people
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have got
are getting
paid ample of amount of
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for their contribution to the
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's development and they are rewarded for the same, but it is not as much as any famous sports player.
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, there are professions where one trains harder than any sports person and dedicate their lives
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in
the
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like people in the army, navy and air force. These people do deserve to be paid much more than they currently do. There are successful sports professionals who earn outrageous amount of
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and there are other professionals that earn
money
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as well, but definitely it's far more less than they truly deserve. In my opinion, the system is unjust.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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