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Some scientist think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give us your opinions

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Some men of science consider that there another
life
 on
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 planet and messages should be sent to contact them. But other scientist say it would be dangerous for mankind. It is important to point out that there are strong views both for and against the argument On the one
hand supporters
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hand, supporters
 of the idea thinks
that is
 essential to explore the universe. Most of the scientists believe that there
are
Suggestion
is
 extraterrestrial
life
. According to the exploration, most of the planets except world are
unviable
causing envy
enviable
 for
living
Suggestion
a living
.
Therefore
 if there is existence, it will require high
technology which
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technology, which
 it is obscure for humanity. Because some planets are boiling hot like hell, or other planets are venomous for humans. But
existence
Suggestion
the existence
 of
life
 in other planets means the other living creatures can tackle
this
 problem and
this
 means their
techonology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 surpassing us nearly three or four times.
Therefore if
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Therefore, if
 we are able to communicate to other intelligent
life
 forms from other planets it would take us a century ahead
On the other
hand opponents
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hand, opponents
 of
this idea consider
Suggestion
this idea, consider
 that we have no idea what they are. We do not rely them if our attempt to contact would finish successfully. Because they are more likely to be invaders than a friend. Except
this
, among the
years most
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years, most
 of people think they are not friends because of the movies. Because of that many people think if aliens exist, their friendship would be
scam
Suggestion
scammed
 In conclusion, I think if we are able to communicate
to
Suggestion
with
 them there are pros and cons of
this
 situation. But i belive it is better to stay in the middle of being neither friend nor hostile

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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