Some people belive that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of the high school programmes.

Unpaid community service should be a compulsory part in future school programmes and I agree to a high extent with
this
statement, so in these
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discuss about positive side and after I put negative side in my 3rd argument. Taking
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account, some people think that children should participate in some community events. Becoming a part of
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this event
these events
they can get experience and knowledge
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related to these activities
related these activities
related this activity
this
activities
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which
can improve their capabilities and maintain their stamina as well. Doing
this
type of other activities children should
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, from doing
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these types
this type
of activities rich people
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know
about poor people and they can
built
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build
their mindset as a helping nature towards to poor people. Not only for current time but
also
in
future
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the future
this
types
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type
of activities
encourage
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encourages
to rich people that they do something for orphan like charity and
also
doing
such
social activities. Apart from
this
it can
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help
to decrease
gap
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the gap
between poor and rich people. Both are
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participating
equally so they can easily know about their
conditions
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condition
and make a bonding with others properly. Now on the dark side, children get extra work load in teen ages, so they
can not
can not
cannot
tackle all
this
load in their mind. Because of
such
activities they could not get much time to focus on their studies.
Moreover
, children get
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distracted
and
also
impact on their regular studies. In
result they
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result, they
could not get better result what they want and get depressed from
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this move
these moves
. To sum up, by doing
this types
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these types
this type
of activities in high school, other societies
also
get encourage while
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seeing
this
types
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type
of activities in children and
also
children can be full fill other's dreams.
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be
a helpful and kind person in future life while doing
such
types of activities.
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